wahh wahh Ustad aa rachna ma tame atlu badhu to kahi nakhyu k shabdo j nathi rahya tamara vakhan karva mate!!!!!
bas, hatkeshwar ni krupa tamara par varsati rahe ane anathi pan vishesh rachna karta raho!!!!
Hiral Thaker "Vasantiful"
June 22, 2008 at 2:15 pm
Very nice!
“Maun ni bahedhari…” is excellent!
Keep it up.
vashishth shukla
June 22, 2008 at 3:37 pm
adbhoot……………………………
jigna
June 23, 2008 at 3:38 am
mast, realy nice one but kem a vyakul man , ansar,,
samajayu nahi..but keep it up.
Hardik Joshi
June 23, 2008 at 6:24 am
Aaare yar, ek dum mast chhe
As specially,
“aa dhara nu koi na favi sakyu
bik lagi matra parvardigar thi”
“su dad dau tari o safaq
swikar vi pade tari ustadi pyar thi”
Wah Wah…. Wah Wah….
Jigar
June 23, 2008 at 7:24 am
moun ni bahidhari su aapvi ?
shabda sav kampi uthya a vichar thi
nice keep it up
Rakesh Goswami
June 23, 2008 at 10:10 am
One of the nicest poem i have ever received which shows the reality of the life….Vanchto j rahyo hu tamne ne nirdosh tamanna jagi gai…man maru damadol thayu ne Vadhu vanchvani ni lagni lagi gai….
( edit karelu chhe Kankshit bhai )
mahendra shukla
June 23, 2008 at 12:02 pm
wonderful gazal,
this time you have maintained the meter to a grater extent than last time,
sooner i think u will be presenting perfect metered gazals
the matter in this gazal is very fine, each sher telling a new story..
wonderful
keep it up
surali patel
June 23, 2008 at 1:48 pm
nice work keep on sending such nice poems
kapildave
June 23, 2008 at 7:04 pm
khubaj saras
ganatra megha
June 24, 2008 at 4:18 am
atyant pardarshak rachna
specially
mujh gunhao ne khuda fari thi gan,
bhul thai lage che tara pyar thi…
khub saras….
avu toj lakhi shakay k jo khuda samaksh sahu gunhao kabulvani takat hoy..
atyant paardarshakta joia… appreciated..
also cha haji pidhi nathi savar thi is good…
j rite manvi dard o gam santade che tenu a khub sundar varnan che..
vishruti
June 22, 2008 at 9:31 am
મોઢું નીચું, લાલ આંખો, વ્યાકુળ મન,
ચા હજી પીધી નથી સવારથી…
What to say? but really very very very nice……keep it up
GOD bless you ALL THE BEST
Manthan Bhavsar
June 22, 2008 at 10:47 am
nice one….
Shrinidh Joshi
June 22, 2008 at 1:22 pm
wahh wahh Ustad aa rachna ma tame atlu badhu to kahi nakhyu k shabdo j nathi rahya tamara vakhan karva mate!!!!!
bas, hatkeshwar ni krupa tamara par varsati rahe ane anathi pan vishesh rachna karta raho!!!!
Hiral Thaker "Vasantiful"
June 22, 2008 at 2:15 pm
Very nice!
“Maun ni bahedhari…” is excellent!
Keep it up.
vashishth shukla
June 22, 2008 at 3:37 pm
adbhoot……………………………
jigna
June 23, 2008 at 3:38 am
mast, realy nice one but kem a vyakul man , ansar,,
samajayu nahi..but keep it up.
Hardik Joshi
June 23, 2008 at 6:24 am
Aaare yar, ek dum mast chhe
As specially,
“aa dhara nu koi na favi sakyu
bik lagi matra parvardigar thi”
“su dad dau tari o safaq
swikar vi pade tari ustadi pyar thi”
Wah Wah…. Wah Wah….
Jigar
June 23, 2008 at 7:24 am
moun ni bahidhari su aapvi ?
shabda sav kampi uthya a vichar thi
nice keep it up
Rakesh Goswami
June 23, 2008 at 10:10 am
One of the nicest poem i have ever received which shows the reality of the life….Vanchto j rahyo hu tamne ne nirdosh tamanna jagi gai…man maru damadol thayu ne Vadhu vanchvani ni lagni lagi gai….
( edit karelu chhe Kankshit bhai )
mahendra shukla
June 23, 2008 at 12:02 pm
wonderful gazal,
this time you have maintained the meter to a grater extent than last time,
sooner i think u will be presenting perfect metered gazals
the matter in this gazal is very fine, each sher telling a new story..
wonderful
keep it up
surali patel
June 23, 2008 at 1:48 pm
nice work keep on sending such nice poems
kapildave
June 23, 2008 at 7:04 pm
khubaj saras
ganatra megha
June 24, 2008 at 4:18 am
atyant pardarshak rachna
specially
mujh gunhao ne khuda fari thi gan,
bhul thai lage che tara pyar thi…
khub saras….
avu toj lakhi shakay k jo khuda samaksh sahu gunhao kabulvani takat hoy..
atyant paardarshakta joia… appreciated..
also cha haji pidhi nathi savar thi is good…
j rite manvi dard o gam santade che tenu a khub sundar varnan che..
lakhta rehsho
bimal
June 24, 2008 at 9:17 am
ati sundar……………………….
kanshitbhai……………….mane aakhi rachana gami……..
વિવેક ટેલર
June 24, 2008 at 10:23 am
સુંદર ગઝલ…
લાગણી અને ભાવની મજેદાર અભિવ્યક્તિ…
છંદ ક્યાંક થોડો શિથિલ પડે છે એ સુધારી શકાય તો પોત ઓર દીપી ઊઠે….
વળી આ છંદમાં સવાર અને વિચાર જેવા ‘લગાલ’ આધારવાળા કાફિયા ન લઈ શકાય. આ છંદમાં લગાગાગાલ કે ગાગાલ કે ગાલ આધારવાળા કાફિયા જ લઈ શકાય…
આશા છે કે આ ટિપ્પણીને આપ વિધાયક સ્વરૂપે લેશો.
Dharini Shah..
June 24, 2008 at 11:03 am
“Tu Kharekhar saruj lakhe chhe…Shafaq
Khubkhub aagal vadh am ashirvaad thi…”
khub saras.. Kankshit..
kya sudhi aa jivavu anasar thi..”
khub saras..!!
Dharini..
fenil shah
June 25, 2008 at 5:52 am
nice work man…
god knows how u get such words while being with numbers all the day!!!
devang parmar
June 25, 2008 at 6:05 am
gai kal no a chhokro shayar bani gayo!!!!
wah kankshit wah,
we all knew u were multi skilled..
u have proved urself on one more field…
bravo
dev
RAKSHIT DAVE
April 6, 2009 at 4:52 am
NICE ONE…!